I am writing to you in hopes that you will consider establishing a branch of your Entertainment Warehouse in the J.A.W.S. community. Our community members could benefit greatly from the wide variety of music, movies, and electronics you carry in your store, as we do not allow the purchasing of many items via the internet, so our local venders must provide most if not all of the items they need and desire.
You have a spotless reputation not only for carrying the latest movies, music, and technology, but for getting them first and providing them at low prices, all things that we at J.A.W.S admire.
Our community is one that you could say is both technologically advanced as well as minimalist. We encourage our citizens to learn about and utilize various technologies, however we also recognize the numerous evils associated with technology and limit the places and times in which one can use various items. Thus, while we encourage and enforce moderation in the use of technology, we still want our citizens to have all the most current items at their disposal for the occasions that they are needed.
Furthermore, I believe that J.A.W.S. is a wonderful community for any of your current employees to transfer to. We take very good care of our citizens, with free gym memberships and use of trainers and dieticians.
It is also incredibly easy, and encouraged, for all members to continue their education on their free time. We have many classes to choose from, from art classes to computer classes, to more academic courses as well.
We also encourage our citizens to enjoy and explore the outdoors, in any of the many preservations and parks that we have in our community.
Ultimately, we encourage an environment in which human connection is the first priority, not technological distractions. Yes, technology provides us with countless conveniences, but these can lead us astray. We must put our friends, families, and community first, not convenience. I would certainly recommend J.A.W.S. as a wholesome, friendly community for your employees as well as their families.
Looking forward to hearing from you, the Entertainment Warehouse would be a wonderful addition to our community.
Katelyn Williamson
Entertainment Division, J.A.W.S.
I heard that you were writing a persuasive letter to an entertainment company asking them to implant a division in the J.A.W.S. community. I also heard that you mentioned the emphasis on morality and digital censorship at J.A.W.S.
ReplyDeleteI noticed that you used some very pleasant images to demonstrate the beauty of jaws. Particularly, the last picture of the park had very serene lighting and lush green colors which were extremely inviting. I also noticed that you stressed that friends, family, and community come first and technology and its usefulness should come second. I really like this concept and think it further explains the society motto, "attacking digital hardships".
I wondered if you could include more specific details and opinions from the community, which might ad to the persuasive argument. I also wondered if you might be able to use a few more "employer specific" details instead of the solid, but more general, details your provided. Overall, you did a very good job of incorporating your design portfolio images and they really made this letter more persuasive. Great Job!
I heard all the things that the J.A.W.S. society offers in great detail and how it is a great community for a variety of reasons. I also heard that you are writing to someone from the Entertainment Warehouse.
ReplyDeleteI noticed how you added descriptions and explanations for each of your pictures in a way that makes the letter organized and easy to follow. I also noticed your professionalism throughout the letter, being that you are writing to an employer.
I wondered why the 4th and 5th pictures are consecutively next to each other rather than adding an explanation for both of them. All the other pictures have individual explanations, but the two right next to each other breaks the flow a little. Other than that, very well done Katy!
I heard how the J.A.W.S society can benefit greatly from Mr. Smith's company in detail. I also heard that while we value entertainment, we are very minimalist about it.
ReplyDeleteI noticed that your pictures tied in very well with your argument. Particularly, I noticed the second image made our society look really high-tech!
I wondered why you didn't mention that you were writing to Mr. Smith as the head of the entertainment industry of J.A.W.S.
Overall, nicely done, Katy!!!