The J.A.W.S society

JAWS stands for the Journeying and Writing Society. The ruling body of JAWS is a dictatorship, run by the friendly dictator, Jordan Wagner. We value control highly in this society. In the year 2010, we broke away from the United States and journeyed into the Pacific ocean, whereupon we found an island to start anew. Our society breaks away from the hardships of regular technology, including cyber bullying, over-dependence on cell phones and Iphones, and unhealthy lifestyles due to too much time spent inside on game systems. We monitor everyone's lifestyles on the island to make sure they are healthy and happy with their technology uses. Kathryn Palmer, the head of history division, is in charge of watching the history of all activity on our internet servers and making sure there are no mishappenings. Tara Schnepp, our athletic director, sets the regular amount of time for kids and teens to get outside and play every day. Katy Williamson, the head of entertainment, makes sure all videos, games and anything else related to entertainment is clean. There has never been a suicide or murder in the JAWS society.

Wednesday, November 24, 2010

Persuasive invitation to an EWM Major


Dear Mary,

As a young person seeking to break into the publishing world, you might find our utopian society, the Journeying and Writing Society (J.A.W.S.) particularly attractive. Here at J.A.W.S. we strive to attack the digital hardships that are so prevalent in modern society, and we have made significant attempts to deviate from the perverted images and invasive viruses that pollute the current digital society. Since you are studying to work within a digital society, editing, writing, and media might become much easier and safer for you when you plant yourself in our beautiful island society.

You need not worry about compromising your health because all of our fruits and vegetables are grown locally, and so you can focus all of your energy on enjoying the great outdoors and the organically grown food available on the island! Since you will not have to stress about the quality of the food you will be consuming, you can focus your attentions on searching for inspiration for future writing projects.

While there is no guarantee you will

Become a carrot, you just might

Feel as healthy as one!

In addition to a great, healthy eats, which should be very important to a young person like yourself, exercise is also incorporated into the daily routine. Two hours of outdoor activity is required of all citizens, so you can get in shape and clear your head at the same time, the perfect makings for strong minds, giving you the physical ability to conquer the academic challenges you might face as an EWM major.


Creativity is more than Welcomed at J.A.W.S.,

this is an interesting advertisement made by

a current EWM major:

Digital crime, as well as physical crime is also not an issue at J.A.W.S., while many college campuses have a high rates of rape and theft, there has never been a rape, murder, or suicide at J.A.W.S.. College aged people, especially women, might fear becoming victims, but there is no reason to fear at J.A.W.S.

Above is an ad for an anti-rape group on an American college campus, but

J.A.W.S. is entirely void of such crime occurrences, so there is no need to waste time combating those issues.

As a college student you definitely need time to unwind and let lose, and here at J.A.W.S. we know we wouldn’t be a true utopian society without social interactions. While we highly discourage drug and alcohol use, we entirely promote wholesome fun for all ages. Our entertainment department for the enjoyment of all of our citizens organizes weekly socials.


Here is a sample advertisement for a social event; although this is more family oriented, there are also single socials, an opportunity to meet other nice young people your same age!

J.A.W.S. also emphasizes environmental awareness, and does not use many paper products, as we realize that the earth’s resources are limited. The young generation, especially those college aged folks like you, seems to be particularly engaged in preserving the earth and going green, and we respect that entirely, and only use biodegradable products. Additionally, all of the learning, reading, and work takes place on computer monitors so paper is rarely used!

We realize the significance of trees

And the natural environment, so we

Use paper products sparingly!

Lastly, the beautiful and diverse landscapes of our island should find favor with your need to expand your horizons, and discover new inspirations for injecting beauty into the media. Although the outskirts of our islands are tropical beaches, the innards resemble the simple pastures of a Connecticut farm.

We hope that you will highly consider a serene and relaxing life at J.A.W.S., free of the digital complications so prevalent in the current collegiate world. Here you will have no worries about your computer crashing at an inopportune moment, maintaining your health, or experiencing natural beauty. We welcome your creativity as an EWM major, as well as your willingness to experience college life in a morally upstanding manner.

Sincerely,

Kathryn Palmer,

Head of History Division

J.A.W.S.

3 comments:

  1. I heard... that you are trying to persuade an EWM major to live on the Utopian island society of J.A.W.S. This society is a very safe a conscious one. It's citizen are conscious technologically, environmentally, and health wise.It encourages social interaction and creativity.

    I noticed... the captions accompanying the images, they were very colorful and creative. However I wish that some of the colors were a tad brighter so that they were easier to read. The images themselves were also very attractive and eye-catching.

    I wondered... what are the governing body and laws in J.A.W.S.? How are they enforced? What is the general attitude of the citizens living in J.A.W.S.?

    Over all I believe you did a very good job. :)

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  2. I heard your very matter-of-fact attitude in your letter. You are trying to keep it personable in saying "you might find our utopian society... particularly attractive". The way you suggest our society is not forceful but is a nice, sensitive way to write to your audience.

    I noticed how you used different colors in describing your images and even made them in the same color scheme as the images themselves. I also noticed how you bolded certain phrases and italicized others, like "creativity". I think this was a very effective technique.

    I wondered if you could have incorporated more technological advantages to all the other benefits you discussed in your letter. While a healthy diet, social interactions, and environmental awareness are all great aspects of J.A.W.S., perhaps you could have included more about the digital advantages in our society. With that being said, you did a great job with your letter, especially the way you did the pictures!

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  3. I heard you describe all of the great attributes of our society. I heard you create a great mental image with your details of why our J.A.W.S society is the best one to live at!

    I noticed that you color-coated the descriptions that went along with the digital images, which adds a lot more attractiveness to the reader's eye. This was a nice touch.

    I wondered if you could talk more about the lessons that an EWM major can learn from being on our island that would benefit them in the long run for their career. Because we have such a high digital literacy rate, it seems to me that it would be worth mentioning to the EWM student.

    You are a great writer!

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